moon song

by sunshine girl

Published October 26, 2006

Hush little darling,
Just rest in your bed,
Dream of sweet angels,
Don’t think of the dead.

Hush little darling,
Don’t spill any tears,
Despite your young age,
You are wise as the years.

Hush little darling,
You need rest as you grow,
Think of your dreamworld,
Forget what you know.

Hush little darling,
Don’t shiver with fear,
These adults don’t know you,
They think children can’t hear.

Hush little darling,
As winter draws near,
Just remember the summer,
And don’t cry little dear,

Hush little darling,
Although Daddy’s gone,
And Mummy won’t say why,
We know something’s wrong.

Hush little darling,
And just wait for sunrise,
As daybreak is dawning,
You’ll soar in the skies.

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pandoraswritings commented Comment · Oct 26, 2006

I liked this one. It was well written and although you did not use larger words, it fit well. Great job!
Pandora

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LetMeLive
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LetMeLive commented Comment · Oct 26, 2006

I like. I like. Nice ryhme scheme. It had a nice affect on drawing the reader in.

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Green Fairy commented Comment · Oct 26, 2006

I really liked it! i thought the repetition was very effective (something i've yet to master myself) and i liked how it progressed. Awesome!

GF

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Shine commented Comment · Oct 26, 2006

Ah!the poem is actually very sweet.

I think this would have gone under lyrics.

The rythm was fine.

The ending of the song is nice.



We know what we are, but know not what we may be.
— William Shakespeare